Tuesday, September 27, 2011

#618

As dismay rushed her cheeks, a flood of sinless tears escaped her soft, graceful eyelashes. "You don't belong here!" screeched the mob of calumny girls. Blinded by the shredded clothes, deprived them of seeing the beautiful charisma within that scrawny, broken sculpture. Sincere understanding, her tacit gift for the world. Simply a hint of a radiant smile could have warmed this helpless spirit. Instead they proclaimed all reasons to release herself from such turmoil. The concrete angel was free. To drift among the above. Once place where she may be loved.
Posted by Writer at 9:18 AM

19 comments:

  1. WriterOctober 4, 2011 at 1:15 PM

    Oh my goodness. I am at a loss for words. This made my day. Absolutely beautiful. Who wrote this? Please tell me if not on the blog then in person. I won't tell anyone else if you want. I just need to know. This is amazing. -Alex Burns P5

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  2. WriterOctober 4, 2011 at 2:36 PM

    This is truly AMAZING! What great word choice. I could really tell what this person was going through.
    -Riley Richmond P6

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  3. WriterOctober 4, 2011 at 3:26 PM

    Word choice is awesome! But I didn't really get what the story was about. Overall good job, that's just one thing I would change!

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  4. WriterOctober 4, 2011 at 3:32 PM

    Mistalyln Schumann wrote this

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  5. WriterOctober 4, 2011 at 4:37 PM

    WOW! This is amazing! Love the word choice!
    -Janelle

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  6. WriterOctober 4, 2011 at 7:29 PM

    Wow...... all I can say is wow.
    -Sam DeMann

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  7. WriterOctober 4, 2011 at 7:31 PM

    This is so insightful.It made me feel as if I was standing right next to her. By the way good word choice, they are amazing.-Hunter Brady Period 5

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  8. WriterOctober 4, 2011 at 7:32 PM

    Wow.... all I can say is wow.
    -Sam DeMann

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  9. WriterOctober 4, 2011 at 8:47 PM

    This is amazing! Good word choice, and imagery. -Sami Walker

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  10. WriterOctober 4, 2011 at 9:00 PM

    Your word choice is flat out amazing. I felt like I was looking at the picture instead of reading it. You are a great writer! -Erika Pehrson

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  11. WriterOctober 4, 2011 at 10:08 PM

    The description and word choice is fantastic! It makes you feel different emotions all in one. It is a sad story but is used in such a good way. -Mindy Jessop

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  12. WriterOctober 5, 2011 at 6:38 AM

    Really cool nice word choice
    Conner Wilkinson

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  13. WriterOctober 5, 2011 at 7:18 AM

    Wow! Great word choice! I could totally picture this.
    -Josie Harris

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  14. WriterOctober 5, 2011 at 1:33 PM

    Fantastic job! You're an amazing writer, and I'm not sure why you only put your number because this is nothing to be ashamed of!

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  15. Zachary YorkeOctober 5, 2011 at 1:35 PM

    You are very descriptive in this paragraph and I loved it!

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  16. WriterOctober 5, 2011 at 7:30 PM

    Amazing word choice!!!! It is so descriptive, you did a great job on this!
    -Taylor Winsness

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  17. WriterOctober 5, 2011 at 9:41 PM

    This is one of the best writing pieces I've ever seen with such good descriptions and word choice! Way to amaze us all!
    - Bobbie Wilde

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  18. WriterOctober 10, 2011 at 5:19 PM

    I like the word choice the words were so good it put a picture in my head-Ammon Mills

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  19. WriterOctober 23, 2011 at 3:41 PM

    This uses very descriptive words good job! - Jofre Ruck

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