Tuesday, September 27, 2011
#56
“Oh my how can they do that to her poor thing?!” My brain screamed at me. When all of my church friends left a new teen sitting there all by herself like a lost puppy . They were all sitting in a row, hair flying in the air as their tossed their head back to laugh. One girl with think coal hair said, “I feel squished like sardines in a box lets move to a different row.” In a split second they all got up, left the girl lost, just sitting there, humiliated and tomato red. That made my stomach flip flop, that feeling to be left alone humiliated, I had felt it. I did not want anyone else to feel it; I got up quick as lightning and asked her, “Hey, can I sit here with you?” Her whole face light up like a Christmas tree and she slid over. The feeling I had at that moment was amazing, I felt I had just helped the whole world. You can change peoples’ lives with one simple gesture and I did that.
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Great job! I wish I had more of your bravery! - Claire Nelson
ReplyDeleteGreat imagery! It was very descriptive! -Andrew Durrant
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ReplyDeleteI love how you used similes to describe the way you were feeling and the way you saw the girl in this scene.-Briana Evertsen
ReplyDeleteGreat job in doing that. It must have been a very hard thing to do. I know for me I should do somthing instead of doing nothing. Great job!!!
ReplyDelete-Sam DeMann
Very descriptive! Good job sticking up for her! -Sami Walker
ReplyDeleteWow really cool! Nice word choice!
ReplyDeleteConner Wilkinson
You did really good on this story and that will get you far! -Zach Yorke
ReplyDeleteGood job :) I really respect people like you that can stand up and take care of other people.
ReplyDeleteKaty Moore P.6
I loved it! It really made me feel like I was there. Great job!-Taylor Winsness
ReplyDeleteGreat job! I loved your word choice! Also very good imagery! I felt like I was there in person! -Janicka
ReplyDeleteGood job! This really says what we should all do!- Jofre Ruck
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